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amber_rose35

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Love is a chain A chain only broken with pain This unforgiving chain reminds the broken only to break them more For loves tales I found so sweet To realize they were only pretty lies Love is a lovely lie A lie so sweet It hurts so deep

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Profile picture of user: k3333
I see You are a Rick and Morty fan. I invite you to read my Rick's development.
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Strong metaphor. I would improve the rhythm of the poem, the consistency of stanza lengths, and correct the mistake loves tales to love's tales, unless it’s a deliberate choice to create heaviness. Respect for the free verse. Practice makes perfect.
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Please comment any changes you would prefer to make my writing better!πŸ˜ŠπŸ’•