lifeinslomo's commented: I do like playing with the lines. Though, I guess, some of the lines still feel gingerly placed

I do like playing with the lines. Though, I guess, some of the lines still feel gingerly placed 

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a_p_wyndham

Oh. I hope you didn't take that the wrong way! I like the poem a lot. 

Actually, the first couple caught me off-guard (not in a bad way), but as they continued I got pulled into the rhythm. I think they make a ton of sense with the internal logic of the poem. 